I'm sat here, remembering yesteryear Mays.
They're striking my heart, as much happier days.
Yet, the diaries I wrote; they emote, and dismay.
For, those pre-summer times, were, too, spent in the shade.


This thread is kept on Dukewhite's request because of the entertainment value, and the occasional serious discussion about the nature of art.

Edited by Sysiyo on 07/07/04 04:22 PM (server time).

why not post your poetry in the Artiste's forum?

and I have to tell you, your overuse (and misuse) of punctuation is painful to my eyeballs

if you dont behave, I'll turn this message board around and we'll just go home

I figure more people are likely to read my poetry if it's isolated from the rest. However, I might give that thread a go tomorrow, to test this theory.

I don't regard it as an overuse of punctuation, as I rarely adhere to the defined rules of punctuation when writing, anyway. As far as I'm concerned, which is, surely, the most important perspective (that of the poet), the commas, and semi-colons, etc, are all in the right places. I wouldn't have posted the poem, otherwise :>)

So basically anyone who reads one of your poems aloud will end up sounding like they are having a panic attack and will be forced to put a paper bag over their head?

Wouldn't your poems and indeed your sentances work better if they flowed, rather than follow some crazy staccato breathless pattern?

"A pint of bitter and a packet of dry roasted peanuts please"

What? You mean....like everybody else's poems? ;>)

anotherpoet to write us a poem.

could it be they're a laughing gnome.

maybe it likes to suck foreskin dicks,

or maybe it plays with pussys and tits

an addition to our crew, do you think they will fit?

or could this be beltene, up to old tricks.


Altoid

Intriguing. I presume Beltene is one of your regulars. Well, I'm not him/her. I'm another poet, and I'll be here for about four more days :>)

I'm going to assume you're an alterego, but just in case you're not...

In reply to:

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As far as I'm concerned, which is, surely, the most important perspective (that of the poet)

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No it's not. If yours were the most important perpective, you wouldn't be showing this drivel to us. Any artwork owes most of its existence as such to an audience.

Though maybe I should encourage your solipsistic view, and urge you not to share any more "poetry" with us unimportant people. Keep all your perpectives to yourself, please.

Maybe if I write this now, while drunk, you'll all understand.

Firstly, I assure you I'm not an alter ego of one of your online companions.

Secondly, if you read back through this thread, you'll notice yours is the first, and only, post with a discerning lack of civility. I believe that the more individualistic a project is, the more artistic it is. You're free to disagree with this, but please spare me such ill-mannered ranting.

Since Thursday, I've posted one poem per day. I'm confident in my writing, and wish to connect with as many people as possible, so as to have more chance of fulfilling my objectives. That's the reason I'm here :>)

Your poetry is completely without merit. I would give an extended blurb on why that is but, to be honest, I don't care enough to do so. Instead, I'm just going to cut and paste all the synonyms for "horrible" listed on thesaurus.com. Ready?

abhorrent
abominable
appalling
awful
beastly
cruel
detestable
disagreeable
disgusting
dreadful
eerie
execrable
fairy
fearful
frightful
ghastly
grim
grisly
gruesome
heinous
hideous
horrendous
horrid
loathsome
lousy
lurid
mean
nasty
obnoxious
offensive
repellent
repulsive
revolting
scandalous
scary
shameful
shocking
sickie
terrible
terrifying
ungodly
unholy
unkind

Nice catch, blanco nino. Too bad your ass got saaaaaaacked.