JarethsGirl (stardust savant)
10/23/06 08:55 AM
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I just found this on my hard drive. Wrote it in high school for a "Poetry Slam." I slammed, alright.
Cover that blemish Cover that mole Cover each blight Now, cover your soul
Cover those scars, girl Cover that bruise Cover your face With attractive hues
Cover that tear stain Cover those blues With white powder, red gloss Mascara and rouge
Cover those roots, girl And change your name Want to make it in lights? Then cover your shame
Cover your colors Lighten the dark Cover your mother Sick white, like a shark
Cover that mouth, girl Now, you're on TV Uncover that body That's all they will see
Cover it up! The critics will shout Whatever you cover You're always cast out
Pull up the cover And hide from the night Cry in the dark, girl Don't cry in the light
"Why didn't you post yesterday?" -- to_dizzy
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Starlite (acolyte)
10/25/06 08:58 AM
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Y'know, I quite like the conceit, and like... half... well, maybe half... of the verses. Not necessarily in the word order given, but still. It seems like if you chucked half of this and reworked the rest, it could be a decent poem.
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Strawman (chameleon, comedian, corinthian and caricature)
10/25/06 03:22 PM
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Who was it who uttered the words "Only a human can create and judge great poetry?"
Fuck, I honestly thought the Praying Mantis might be in with a shout.
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th0mas (acolyte)
10/26/06 06:40 AM
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I think it looks very dull when seeing it on paper while when read loud or being sung in an interesting way there would be some potential. There is too much concept to make it really bloody awful.
 Liest das denn keiner außer mir?
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Persilot (acolyte)
10/26/06 04:28 PM
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Inspired by a nightmare I had recently...
The Crawling Dark
When winter comes a blowing, with it's cold and frosty breeze, The Crawling Dark comes creeping like a horrible disease. He gobbles up the greener grass and gloops on all the trees, He leaves his slimey blackness with it's sticky slug like sheen. He flows in all the rivers and he slips into your house, And when he's done his crawling there, he'll jump into your mouth!
"Well I'm a common working man, with a half of bitter, bread and jam and if it pleases me I'll put one on you man... when the copper fades away."
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RabbitFighter (acolyte)
10/26/06 05:58 PM
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Winter is a metaphor for blonde creep, right?
[re: Persilot]
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In reply to:
Inspired by a nightmare I had recently...
I can honestly say I'm glad I've never had a dream of Dogz ejaculating in my mouth.
Culture, alienation, boredom and despair
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Atonalexpress (acolyte)
10/28/06 02:17 AM
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They say that light spreads far and wide, And that it conquers the darkest tide, But evil lurks when the light shines, Upon the best of times and during work's deadlines, It creeps and crawls and bends and dives, To direct a spotlight upon what thrives, Which is typically called the "sweet deal", Outside closed doors truth remains surreal. © 2006 JAC

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Persilot (acolyte)
10/29/06 07:37 PM
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A TW horror story for the Halloween season.
It was another gloomy storm racked night, Outside the wind did howl. When on my screen I saw a flash, That made me frown and scowl.
I clicked the icon, heart in mouth, And gasped in awful pain, The message came from Diamond Dogz, I knew it'd be inane.
"Dear Percy how I love your Poetry" The wizened fiend did crow, "Perhaps you'll come away with me, and live with me in Turkey?"
"Not I" I cried in mortal fear, Perhaps the beast was nigh, Observing through a telescope, Just waiting for his time.
And then I saw a horrid face, Observing through the glass. The manic grin of partner Dave, He laughed and laughed and laughed..
He smashed the glass and grabbed my arm, And dragged me to my doom, And now I write this warning, From a tiny empty room.
So if you get a message, On a dark and stormy night, Please dear friends don't open it, Or you'll share my doom.
"Don't see what I do not want to see, you don't hear what I don't say. Won't be what I don't want to be, I continue in my way."
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schizophrenic (acolyte)
10/29/06 07:51 PM
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It would've been ten times scarier had you titled it "Get Out Of My Ass! For The Love Of God, GET OUT OF MY ASS!"
But, you know, I guess there's something to be said for subtlety.
I'm a kid And I love CANDY!!!
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Atonalexpress (acolyte)
10/30/06 03:57 PM
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Bats at night fly lowly through your arches, They would not be there if not for the love of starches, But oral fixations are hard to stop once started, Fragrance sprays are sold to those who frequently farted.
So lick your long lollipops and hard English Toffee Bars, While you trick and treat old ladies as they empty candy jars, But remember ugly witches adore fat cats, Who are malodorous and attract black gnats. ©2006 JAC

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