Persilot (acolyte)
03/05/07 09:14 PM
|
|
The Jigsaw man craves only peace, He wants completion; he seeks release, There's something missing from his face, Perhaps you missed it in your haste?
The Jigsaw man is corner wise, You form the outlines of his eyes, But man is made from many parts, And Jigsaw man has lost his heart.
Jigsaw man is in a box, It seems that something pure is lost, Perhaps you'll have to start again, Or wait until a wet weekend.
Jigsaw man has gone to pieces...
You sit there in your comfort, you don't believe I'm real. But you cannot buy protection from the way that I feel!
|
JarethsGirl (stardust savant)
03/12/07 05:23 AM
|
|
I hope this doesn't sound like anything but a compliment, but your writing seems to be improving so much, Percy. I'm very impressed. Not that I'm the one to impress around here, but you get what I mean...
Anyway, here's something that's incredibly dark and creepy. And, I would hope so, as my main inspiration for writing this (though there were many) was a carnival-type dark ride we used to have at our local amusement park, until it got torn down about ten years ago. Here's some info on it, if anyone cares. (This is the second page of info because it addresses the incarnation of the ride that I actually remember, but the first page is pretty interesting, too.)
This poem is basically an eerily-executed warning about fearing time and hanging onto the past so much that you fail to live in the moment. Also, it's about the "price" of the overcompensation - living with abandon, being thoughtless, because one feels they have no higher power to answer to and that life is just one big joyride.
(Don't mind the gratuitous elipses. I did that because TW doesn't seem to recognize indentations.)
I heard time chattering inside my closet .............Tittering At the expense of my own stunted laughter .............Stunned The runt amongst the litter Of dry bones That shriek, like flutes Like hollow bamboo shoots They still chime in The illusion Of oxygen The thought that made me pant with panic .............Hah, hah, hah
Time was gnawing on my toys and shrunken gowns At once, I thought, Because, they taste of me .............Tick, tick, tick And, soon he'll have a thirst for me That can't be satiated In a scent He'll crave and come for my own flesh He'll lap the salt from my own skin As if .............Lovingness Had overcome him
So, I upheld the pretense;
The living dead can dance I'm free as free can be Spinning in the dark With me and me
I did not notice How I waltzed .............Creak, creak, creak Only but a whisper hovering over the parquet Feeling cold as clay To the bottom of my soles With my toes Pressed so crisply into his He dipped me into the abyss Into dismay Into decay Where all is nude Within the design Of his dark decrepitude
And, there I sensed his silhouette Which never left It mastered every movement Every languid motion Of my porcelain Marionette; Clamoring and cackling
Time is cachinating In his cold and calculating Machination Convulsing In repulsion The everlasting echo Of my maturation Rendered hopeless By means of its late achievement
.............The tragic fault in my living bereavement
The laughter in the dark Was me For, when I breathed My seething fears Into the night They seized me tight Strangling me inside the grasping fingers of my ribs; I could not sense his delicate, skeletal grip Which rested on my hip, Until I felt his pointed finger pressed Into my lips
I am his twin I have no choice, now But, to grin, for Time is grinning As I'm spinning Into Le Cachot With nowhere left to go
.............Click, click, click
I have a couple of fag women I go hunting with. - Altoid
|
Persilot (acolyte)
03/18/07 09:31 AM
|
|
Thanks Kate, wish I could manage to write some longer pieces like some of your excellent poems. Anyway here's another shorty.
Weary City
I stumble down streets I no longer remember, Heart lost in this city of fallen pretenders, Indifferent currents slowly sweep me along, Whilst sirens scream songs that were lost long ago.
What man could make these concrete hells? Of towering greys and cheap rotting smells, Where wide eyed urchins pant their glee, Disturbing the angels dreaming of sleep.
Can weary blue eyes ever find peace? Maybe the city will grant it's release, Where rich soils lie and tall trees grow, There you shall find me at peace with my soul.
You sit there in your comfort, you don't believe I'm real. But you cannot buy protection from the way that I feel!
|
JarethsGirl (stardust savant)
03/27/07 02:23 AM
|
|
Here's something shorter, just to prove to myself I can do it.
I hear the Mourning Dove's twirling, tottery siren She hints that there's light to look forward to Perhaps, she will rebuild the nest in my window sill That I poked at with a bloodless ball point Sending seasons of the amassed twigs, And shit, And one rotting dud egg From her former Spring's quiver, Crumbling open to the bricks Below, where it bloomed In a cloud of grey dust And short, downy plumeage
I clench my eyes tight as I teeter on sleep Her wings, then, Rebound off the glass, As she rattles a wail of indignance and shudders to flight But, I can't yet illuminate A warm, yolky scape For her beauty to mingle with So, I imagine her flying away, And gradually merging Into a black void
I have a couple of fag women I go hunting with. - Altoid
|
Persilot (acolyte)
04/05/07 05:19 PM
|
|
I like it... more crap from me though I'm afraid!
Streets
I'm lost down the streets that remember no name, Skipping past cobbles that bear me no blame, I'm scowling at shadows and paying no heed, Whilst dancing in time to the hate of your screams.
These dark city street lamps reflect what is sane, Such oceans of darkness where light laid no claim, Not even the vilest can dare not to dream, When you're trapped in the horror of what you have seen.
The night has descended from where it has lain, Remember the faces of those it has slain, Awaken and shake off the dastardly sleep, Too late you forget that you sow what you reap...
You sit there in your comfort, you don't believe I'm real. But you cannot buy protection from the way that I feel!
|
JarethsGirl (stardust savant)
04/06/07 09:53 PM
|
|
This poem is sort of gritty and noir, I like.. And, rhyming scheme is great.
I've been trying to loosen up a bit on my structure and rhyme, but I find it hard because I really like the symmetry of it. Anyway, here's something a little more free-flowing I did when I found out about this Kurt and Courtney biopic that Love is apparently putting together.
I'm almost embarrassed to share this one because of the first two lines... Almost. 
There's a gallery under his clothes Of fresh wounds to fuck Each gash he makes opens an eye But, each blink is now grand with torment He's no longer the right to be dressed; To be seen
His face caked with seven, strange colors The dry, rigid layers are cracked By his every expression He sits by a mirror and he peels one away Each day, Revealing another invention
Soon, he has pried at his own fleshy film He takes off his mask and he smiles He hangs his own face up to dry They clamor to buy What they proudly must don As a trophy To their sensitivity
Now, they all stand At the feet of his handiwork Clutching and tapping their chins, Like hot microphones The painter; Listening, laughing and jerking, As they strain to detect Every vague undertone
Quickly, He runs out of paint In wells, they collect all the trickling acrylic To dip their dull wicks in his own crimson ink To transcribe his journals To make him a soft drink
His body's still wet, Incarnate; They sop his imprint With a long sheet of canvas And, harvest his bone as a tool To slash, milk and swell The price on the tag That's been, Callously, Strung to his toe
It's time for you to come out of Weed Heaven and Potville for a second and give me a little informationi! - Captain Lunatic
|
Froggy Starlust (acolyte)
05/15/07 10:08 AM
|
|
S'il est un musicien dont j'admire les défis, C'est bien le grand, le beau, l'unique David Bowie ; Sa musique me prend et elle me stupéfie Plus efficacement qu'un coup dans les glaouis.
Mon Espace
|
JarethsGirl (stardust savant)
05/15/07 03:19 PM
|
|
What a pair... You and Bowie, I mean.
Whoa momma! I like them apples! I'd buy that for a dollar! - 96dbFreak on chronic
|
Froggy Starlust (acolyte)
05/15/07 05:04 PM
|
|
Here's a Yank who knows her French slang .
Mon Espace
|
Starlite (acolyte)
05/15/07 09:50 PM
|
|
Oh Sylvian J¡¯aime penser c'est ¨¤ toi que Pulp a d§Ûdi§Û "Oh Sylvia" Tes cheveux, si longs et doux Tes mamelons, si mous et roux Simon Napier-Bell te croyait belle P'tet tu l'as servi pour amuse-gueule Oh Sylvian Nous tous savons qu'il te monta comme un Sybian.
All right, so it's not a quatrain. Tant pis!
"why, instead of semen, couldn't men ejaculate strawberry jam or something?" --jareth's tights "I have had contact with a vagina." --strangeDivine
|
|