I figure more people are likely to read my poetry if it's isolated from the rest. However, I might give that thread a go tomorrow, to test this theory.

I don't regard it as an overuse of punctuation, as I rarely adhere to the defined rules of punctuation when writing, anyway. As far as I'm concerned, which is, surely, the most important perspective (that of the poet), the commas, and semi-colons, etc, are all in the right places. I wouldn't have posted the poem, otherwise :>)