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And she felt suddenly old.

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I like this line a lot. It creates an image in my mind's eye of someone aging quite rapidly, which wouldn't be the case if you'd placed "suddenly" one word back.

Here's my emo ode to unrequited love and the animals who knowingly, desperately perpetrate it.


You seem to care that no one dares
to read the threats my passage bears
You want to seem to care to see
this sable ink unfold from me

But, if you spied my plunging frown
I do not think you would swoop down
to snatch me from the brink, between
your talons, black, and eyes, citrine -

that claw my face with moonlight, where
my skull drapes backwards on the chair;
a dewy rose of numbing white,
that cranes itself to shake the night

I wait within your empty nest
to feel the warmth inside your breast
For, charity and arid scratching,
were egging on my backwards hatching

I am your helpless cub, instead;
a lanquid rainbow, colors bled;
leaked through the punctures from your fangs
to briefly slake your hunger pangs

Then, drug into your dusky cave
I'm hit with such a rancid wave
It's stinking with the spoil of
the victims of your nature, love;
your satiated hate for love;
your snarling mouth, agape for love


"What I learned from the future is Sharpie markers will replace facial hair and all men are impotent except Sean Connery. The future looks bright." - T.P. on Zardoz