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Starlite
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05/30/07 12:05 PM
Re: > [re: Froggy Starlust]  

Bravo, mon petit grenouille! You make my silly poem sound so grave and suave.

So this isn't poetry, exactly, but I suppose you could consider it really, really awful "poetry," to the point that it's prose. In any case, I thought you might enjoy it, Monsieur Froggy. Somebody requested a romance story about Mika, and so I attempted to oblige. The catch being that, as I do not want to publically speculate on his sexuality, I had to keep it gender-ambiguous, which was much harder than I originally anticipated, and made for pretty clunky sentences, too.

Oh, and it might help to be aware of these lyrics if you don't know them already.

Breathe

The show had just ended, the confetti barely settling over the forest of applause-reddened hands and breathless grins. Jem snuck out the back door before the first few paper flakes could make their way past the audience's sweat-dampened hair and onto the floor. Crowds always made Jem feel suffocated, and a little bit like disappearing, though with Jem's height and startling cloud of auburn hair, disappearing in a crowd could hardly have been possible.

Jem had never heard of Mika prior to that night. Going to the concert was Susan's idea. She was covering the show for a small local zine, and had a spare ticket, and so decided that Jem should accompany her. "You'll love him," she insisted. "You're kind of weird and you like weird music anyway, so this should totally be your thing." Jem considered protesting that statement, but knowing Susan, decided against it. In any case, she turned out to be entirely right. Mika was the most brilliantly bright thing Jem had heard or seen in ages, and despite the claustrophobia, the music made Jem feel as though the whole world were inside one's ribcage, pushing one's lungs open to eternity in a euphoric burst of energy. However, as soon as the music ended, Jem could feel the crowd crushing in again, and this is why, having briefly ditched Susan, Jem was now searching out a few moments' solitary peace.

Gasping in fresh air, Jem leaned back against the brick wall, and then almost slid to the floor when a side door slammed open suddenly and nearly caught Jem's nose as it did so.

"Oh! I'm sorry, I didn't see you there," a disarmingly familiar voice said, and Jem was about to brush off the apology and move to a less violent section of wall when recognition kicked in. Mika was staring at the redhead in a bit of flustered concern, equally as sweaty and confetti-drenched and out of breath, but a little less sprawled along wall-plaster.

"Uh," Jem replied eloquently, tongue catching on dry lips. "I was just trying to... get away, but... so many people, and..."

Mika nodded, smiling a little. "Me too. You may want to get away from the stage door though," he suggested. Then seeing how pale Jem remained, he paused. "I didn't hurt you or anything, did I? Do you need to lie down?"

"No, no, I'm fine," Jem breathed, straightening up and pushing messy red hair out of dark eyes. "You were amazing, by the way. Brilliant show."

"Took your breath away, right?" Mika laughed. He fixed his eyes on Jem's. "Look, I have to go, but if you want to stick around..." He didn't finish the sentence, but continued smiling for a while, and then turned to go inside.

Jem thought of Susan and her teasing, and what she'd say if she were to be there now. Of the crush of fans exciting the theatre, of the long ride home, and Susan's chatter about how "weird" they were. Of the fact that Mika, in addition to putting on the best show Jem had seen that year, was disconcertingly gorgeous in person. Of what Susan would say about THAT.

Jem stuck around.

Mika didn't come back out.

Jem left.

It was only to be expected, Jem thought walking to the car. It was silly to wait. Plus for what? An autograph? Not like a scribble on some paper was really worth anything. "Not anything," Jem said out loud to the pavement, studying its cracks with great concentration, and promptly smacked into someone. "Sorry!"

Jem looked up to see the now-familiar haze of curly hair and lanky frame, and blushed. "We're making this a habit, I think," Mika said. He crinkled his nose. "I'm really sorry for not coming back out. I meant to, I promise. I got... things happened." Jem noticed he looked tired, and seemed upset. Jem also noticed that he was, again, entirely alone. Surely that was a little strange. "Are you feeling better? Do you want me to sign anything?" Mika asked.

"Not anything," Jem repeated, without thinking. They looked at each other again. "Do you need to go back?" Jem said at last, awkwardly.

"Yes," Mika said. He didn't move. Another pause. "Do you ever..." Mika began.

Stopped.

"What do you do when you need to breathe?"

Jem looked at him, and suddenly felt entirely at ease. "Sometimes, I go for a car ride. To see a secret. The most beautiful place that no-one ever thinks of."

"Show me," Mika said simply.

Jem nodded. They got into Jem's car, and Jem set out for the highway. Everything was a bit surreal, but then Jem thought that the highway was always surreal. They were both quiet for a while, mutely following the silk stretch of road ahead into the pale horizon. The sun had set a while ago, and the sky was turning a deepening violet. There was no moon and no stars; the night floated like a smooth purple tapestry above the warm road. Jem finally broke the silence. "You're not scared?"

Mika turned to look at Jem. "Scared? Of what? Of you?"

"Maybe. You don't think this is weird? That I'm weird?"

A shy smile flitted over Mika's lips and softened into his eyes. "No. I don't know; I was always weird. I don't think I know what weird is. I think normal is weird." He looked back towards the road. "What do you think I am?"

"Beautiful."

Jem breathed in quickly, and felt a flutter of panic as the word slipped out and hung in the air between them. But Mika only kept smiling, slightly wider now, with a child's open grace.

They passed under a bridge, and a grey mass rose before them, set in a field of glittering white lights, as though a duchess' diamonds had been scattered all over. Slender towers and spiraling peaks rose from it into the sky, looking like some fantastic foreign castle. As the car rushed closer, the castle acquired more details, delicate stairs winding round it like laces, and lights sparkling over its silhouette. A shadowy plume of violet smoke rose from one of the soaring towers: the breath of a dragon encircling the castle's parapets.

"There," Jem said. "This is it. It's a factory, you know, and no one thinks of factories as beautiful. But at night, spotted with twinkling lights as though wreathed in garlands of fireflies, it's like... a cybernetic fairytale. It feels like a whole other world, like something between realities. Even in the midst of all its pollution, all the other cars, I feel like I am separated from everything, and all that exists is the beauty and the speed, and I can breathe the whole night in, and--"

"Pull over," Mika interrupted softly.

Jem turned to him in surprise. "Now? Why?"

"I can't kiss you while you're driving."

Jem did as Mika asked.

It was funny how well they understood each other's breathing then, underneath that violet sky and its cloak of purple smoke, smoke and breath mixing together, red hair tangling with brown as though the curls were made of heavy air.

It was dawn when they made their way back to the city, a lazy, rose-colored, yawning dawn. The statue of liberty rose faintly out of the mist that gathered over the water. "I always wonder what she's thinking," Jem confided to Mika as they passed her by. "When I go driving like this, I feel like she can breathe, and I am the one made of stone sometimes. She seems so lonely then, I wonder if she shares everybody's loneliness."

"Nobody," Mika replied thoughtfully, "is ever the only lonely one."

Their hands were intertwined, fingers pressed together. They didn't look at each other, but they breathed in unison.

Jem stopped the car outside Mika's hotel. "Thank you," Mika said. Jem nodded. Mika was going to say something else, but Jem only smiled, and both knew that nothing more was needed then.

"There are always too many people," Jem told him, a little sadly.

They parted after that.


When Mika's next single came out, Susan brought over a copy for Jem. She was surprised to find Jem had a copy already in the car, but even more surprised that Jem refused to listen to its b-side track with her. "Why do you have it then?" she asked.

"I do listen to it," Jem said. "Just by myself, when I need to get away. It reminds me how to breathe."

"I swear, you're so weird," Susan said.

Jem let her keep it at that.



The End.

So yeah... it's kinda crap. And honestly, not particularly romantic, because I couldn't really connect to "Jem" at all. But crap is the point, isn't it?

"why, instead of semen, couldn't men ejaculate strawberry jam or something?"
--jareth's tights
"I have had contact with a vagina."
--strangeDivine


 
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*Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poetry  Persilot09/24/06 11:34 AM
.*Such a rush  JarethsGirl11/26/06 12:08 PM
.*Game. Flood. Atlas.  theidiot211/30/06 05:04 AM
.*The sweetest pain  Persilot11/30/06 02:23 PM
.*Sleepers  theidiot211/28/06 11:28 AM
.*How It Feels  JarethsGirl12/04/06 06:37 AM
.*The Passing  theidiot212/05/06 05:14 AM
.*No Title  JarethsGirl12/07/06 06:39 AM
.*Re: Sleepers  Persilot11/28/06 02:13 PM
.*As yet unpublished shite  Persilot11/19/06 06:57 PM
.*Drift  Persilot11/19/06 07:20 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poetry  Strawman11/11/06 05:49 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  Sam_X11/12/06 07:13 PM
.*bloody awful  ghostlove11/07/06 01:33 AM
.*Re: bloody awful  Persilot11/07/06 07:18 PM
.*Variation on a single theme  Remade/Remodeled11/07/06 00:50 AM
.*Worst Poem Ever  schizophrenic11/04/06 12:42 PM
.*Re: Worst Poem Ever  Claude12/07/06 09:44 PM
.*Just so I don't get bumped down over Xmas...  Persilot12/19/06 01:02 PM
.*Cursory Rhyme  JarethsGirl12/23/06 05:54 AM
.*Wake Up  JarethsGirl12/30/06 02:18 AM
.*As Promised  schizophrenic12/23/06 10:30 PM
.*Merry Meatmas, indeed  JarethsGirl12/24/06 02:29 AM
.*Re: Merry Meatmas, indeed  schizophrenic12/24/06 01:16 PM
.*Re: Merry Meatmas, indeed  JarethsGirl12/30/06 07:50 PM
.*Bit grim this one...  Persilot01/02/07 06:58 PM
.*I must be sleep deprived  JarethsGirl01/15/07 06:29 AM
.*The saucy maid  Persilot01/02/07 07:52 PM
.*Politics  Persilot02/07/07 07:17 PM
.*Another one...  Persilot02/07/07 07:40 PM
.*Re: The saucy maid  Persilot02/02/07 12:24 PM
.*Sometimes fast is good. Sometimes not.  JarethsGirl02/02/07 12:40 PM
.*Looking for a rhyme  Sam_X02/06/07 05:02 AM
.*Bottle  JarethsGirl02/06/07 06:59 AM
.*Re: Bottle  Sam_X02/06/07 05:58 PM
.*Oh, Barnacles  JarethsGirl02/08/07 06:50 AM
.*Re: Oh, Barnacles  Persilot02/22/07 08:57 AM
.*Throw Mama From the Pirate Ship  JarethsGirl03/01/07 02:45 AM
.*Re: Throw Mama From the Pirate Ship  Persilot03/05/07 09:04 PM
.*Le Cachot (The Dungeon)  JarethsGirl03/12/07 05:23 AM
.*Weary City  Persilot03/18/07 09:31 AM
.*Gloria  JarethsGirl03/27/07 02:23 AM
.*Streets  Persilot04/05/07 05:19 PM
.*Still Warm (For Kurt)  JarethsGirl04/06/07 09:53 PM
.*Quatrain pour Bowie  Froggy Starlust05/15/07 10:08 AM
.*Re: Quatrain pour Bowie  JarethsGirl05/15/07 03:19 PM
.*Re: Quatrain pour Bowie  Froggy Starlust05/15/07 05:04 PM
.*Re: Quatrain pour David Sylvian  Starlite05/15/07 09:50 PM
.*Re: Quatrain pour David Sylvian  Froggy Starlust05/16/07 05:33 AM
.*Re: Quatrain pour David Sylvian  Starlite05/16/07 06:24 AM
.*>  Froggy Starlust05/26/07 03:03 PM
..Re: >  Starlite05/30/07 12:05 PM
.*The Quietus  JarethsGirl05/31/07 00:41 AM
.*Re: The Quietus  Starlite05/31/07 01:44 AM
.*Drunk  Persilot08/04/07 10:21 PM
.*Summer days  Persilot08/06/07 07:41 PM
.*Can't decide if this is clever or corny  JarethsGirl09/24/07 07:30 AM
.*On the buses  Persilot11/17/07 01:36 PM
.*Re: On the buses  JarethsGirl11/17/07 01:52 PM
.*Life on Mouse?  Diamond Frog11/26/07 08:16 PM
.*Re: Life on Mouse?  JarethsGirl11/27/07 01:36 AM
.*Disneyphagia  Diamond Frog11/27/07 08:58 AM
.*Cold Light Of Day  Strawman11/28/07 05:39 PM
.*Re: Cold Light Of Day  JarethsGirl12/08/07 07:36 AM
.*A Shortcut To Meryl Streep's Bush  Strawman11/28/07 07:06 PM
.*Anyone know her agent's number?  EuropeanCanon12/05/07 09:47 AM
.*Re: Anyone know her agent's number?  SoulLoveChild12/13/07 04:55 PM
.*Re: Anyone know her agent's number?  Diamond Frog12/14/07 06:41 AM
.*Re: Anyone know her agent's number?  ghostlove12/14/07 02:14 PM
.*I'll be takin' these Huggies and whatever $ ya got  Marquis12/14/07 03:24 PM
.*Re: I'll be takin' these Huggies and whatever $ ya  SoulLoveChild12/14/07 11:46 PM
.*Re: I'll be takin' these Huggies and whatever $ ya  Diamond Frog12/15/07 08:12 AM
.*that bloody V and G keyboard mixup....  SoulLoveChild12/15/07 04:57 PM
.*Re: that bloody V and G keyboard mixup....  Diamond Frog12/16/07 07:40 AM
.*Re: that bloody V and G keyboard mixup....  SoulLoveChild12/16/07 04:50 PM
.*You can crush it but it's always here  ghostlove12/17/07 12:08 PM
.*Gadgie  Persilot02/11/08 07:19 PM
.*Immaculate  JarethsGirl03/08/08 02:13 AM
.*Dreary?  Persilot03/13/08 03:01 PM
.*Bastards  Persilot04/18/08 07:39 PM
.*The crunch  Persilot06/10/08 12:29 PM
.*Re: The crunch  JarethsGirl07/01/08 00:50 AM
.*Periphery  Strawman09/13/08 06:38 AM
.*Brian  JarethsGirl09/13/08 06:51 AM
.*Re: Brian  Persilot09/13/08 09:14 AM
.*Purple Platypus  Diamond Frog09/17/08 06:42 PM
.*shit  JarethsGirl01/17/09 02:56 PM
.*Clockwork  Persilot11/05/09 04:15 PM
.*Re: Clockwork  JarethsGirl11/12/09 02:19 AM
.*Valentine had his day  Persilot02/15/11 05:53 PM
.*Re: Valentine had his day  JarethsGirl02/17/11 10:47 PM
.*Re: Valentine had his day  Persilot03/05/11 06:25 PM
.*Re: Valentine had his day  Persilot03/07/11 03:24 PM
.*By my reflection  Persilot05/21/11 12:29 PM
.*Modern Living  Persilot02/02/10 04:58 PM
.*All thats left  Persilot08/04/10 07:27 PM
.*Meadowell  Persilot11/05/09 04:16 PM
.*Re: shit  Diamond Frog01/18/09 07:57 AM
.*nom nom nom  JarethsGirl01/18/09 12:28 PM
.*Re: nom nom nom  Diamond Frog01/18/09 01:20 PM
.*Re: nom nom nom  JarethsGirl01/18/09 01:59 PM
.*Re: Bastards  JarethsGirl04/19/08 00:11 AM
.*Dreams  Persilot04/10/08 02:47 PM
.*Re: Dreams  Strawman04/11/08 05:31 PM
.*Re: Dreams  Persilot04/11/08 07:35 PM
.*Re: Dreary?  Strawman03/19/08 04:48 PM
.*Re: that bloody V and G keyboard mixup....  Diamond Frog12/16/07 05:54 PM
.*Mango  Strawman11/28/07 07:37 PM
.*Re: Mango  Diamond Frog11/29/07 04:56 AM
.*Re: The Quietus  JarethsGirl05/31/07 06:31 PM
.*Re: The Quietus  Froggy Starlust05/31/07 03:59 PM
.*Re: >  Froggy Starlust05/30/07 06:37 PM
.*Re: >  Starlite05/30/07 06:52 PM
.*Re: >  Persilot05/30/07 05:23 PM
.*Re: >  Starlite05/30/07 06:12 PM
.*red hair = PW?  jareth's tights05/30/07 01:43 PM
.*Re: >  ghostlove05/26/07 04:17 PM
.*Re: >  Froggy Starlust05/26/07 05:08 PM
.*Quatrain fashion  Froggy Starlust05/16/07 08:49 AM
.*Bee  Persilot05/21/07 06:52 PM
.*Untitled  JarethsGirl05/27/07 03:07 AM
.*Féerie  Froggy Starlust05/26/07 07:15 AM
.*The danger of songs  Persilot05/26/07 05:00 PM
.*Re: The danger of songs  Froggy Starlust05/26/07 07:15 PM
.*Re: Quatrain pour David Sylvian  Froggy Starlust05/16/07 08:38 AM
.*Just one more reason why 1 square is never enough  JarethsGirl05/16/07 01:17 AM
.*Jigsaw man  Persilot03/05/07 09:14 PM
.*Re: Oh, Barnacles  Persilot02/28/07 12:08 PM
.*Re: Oh, Barnacles  Quentin02/22/07 04:03 PM
.*Re: Oh, Barnacles  schizophrenic02/22/07 06:12 PM
.*Re: Oh, Barnacles  Quentin02/23/07 03:52 PM
.*Um...  schizophrenic02/23/07 04:27 PM
.*Nice cup of tea anyone?  Persilot01/06/07 10:44 AM
.*Re: The saucy maid  anisette01/02/07 08:22 PM
.*Re: As Promised  Sam_X12/24/06 00:39 AM
.*Brings tears to my eye  JarethsGirl11/05/06 02:23 PM
.*God-Awful Halloween Poem  Atonalexpress10/30/06 03:57 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  Persilot10/22/06 03:37 PM
.*Cover Girl  JarethsGirl10/23/06 08:55 AM
.*The cruelty of the mirror  Persilot11/02/06 06:59 PM
.*Wow  JarethsGirl11/05/06 08:35 PM
.*NOW!  anisette11/05/06 08:55 PM
.*More!  Persilot11/22/06 04:20 PM
.*On names of poems  theidiot211/23/06 04:25 AM
.*Each rung has an order  JarethsGirl11/23/06 05:19 AM
.*Alliterate me, Kate  JarethsGirl11/05/06 09:32 PM
.*Evanescence lyrics  JarethsGirl11/03/06 06:58 AM
.*The grip of Winter  Persilot11/03/06 07:25 AM
.*Selfishlessness  JarethsGirl11/03/06 05:45 AM
.*Re: Selfishlessness  Starlite11/04/06 07:01 AM
.*Re: Selfishlessness  JarethsGirl11/04/06 07:37 AM
.*Re: The cruelty of the mirror  Strawman11/02/06 07:44 PM
.*The Crawling Dark  Persilot10/26/06 04:28 PM
.*A Halloween TW poem  Persilot10/29/06 07:37 PM
.*Re: A Halloween TW poem  schizophrenic10/29/06 07:51 PM
.*The Shining Light  Atonalexpress10/28/06 02:17 AM
.*Winter is a metaphor for blonde creep, right?  RabbitFighter10/26/06 05:58 PM
.*Re: Cover Girl  th0mas10/26/06 06:40 AM
.*Re: Cover Girl  Starlite10/25/06 08:58 AM
.*Re: Cover Girl  Strawman10/25/06 03:22 PM
.*Sunday  Persilot10/15/06 03:12 PM
.*Re: Sunday  diamondogz7410/15/06 03:36 PM
.*Empty shores  Persilot10/18/06 04:18 PM
.*Re: Empty shores  JarethsGirl10/23/06 08:34 AM
.*In The Void  Atonalexpress10/19/06 02:35 AM
.*Unrequited love  Persilot10/11/06 06:18 PM
.*Re: Unrequited love  Froggy Starlust10/11/06 06:26 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  Persilot10/08/06 06:08 AM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  Froggy Starlust10/09/06 07:11 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  Froggy Starlust10/08/06 04:18 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  Persilot10/09/06 05:02 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  Persilot10/09/06 06:54 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poetry  Starlite10/05/06 05:00 AM
.*Words  Persilot09/30/06 09:41 AM
.*Re: Words  Sam_X09/30/06 10:12 AM
.*The curse  Persilot09/30/06 10:11 AM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  Sam_X09/24/06 02:44 PM
.*Re: Didn't realise you wrote such bloody awful poe  elvenlass09/24/06 05:48 PM
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